Lilyriver |
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Image © Creds: hazy.o.ultimately on TikTok |
Affiliation
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RiverClan Elder | |
Vitals
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Living at the age of 58 Moons (4.5 Years)
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Appearance
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Short Description: |
A longhaired, white she-cat with a thinning pelt and pale blue eyes |
Long Description: | Lilyriver has ghostly white pelt flowing like the ripples of water. Her long, wavy fur has thinned with age, especially around her delicate nose, ears, and paws, exposing the pale pink skin beneath and giving her fur an almost translucent appearance. Her eyes are a rare shade of extremely pale icy blue, glimmering like the sky against clouds in contrast to her pale form, framed by soft white lashes, though it does not come at a price, as one was clawed in a border skirmish. She has a lithe frailty that emulates a light framed stature in her youth. |
Personality
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History
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Full History: | Kithood: Apprenticeship: During a particularly harsh leaf-bare, Lilypaw’s true resilience was tested. The river had frozen over, leaving the clan struggling to find food. RiverClan was getting low on prey as all the clans were, but Lilypaw refused to let the situation defeat her. She pushed herself to help patrol the land and hunt on the scarce frozen ground, managing to bring catch and return prey to the clan, not enough to completely sustain it, however, her efforts were appreciated by Mallowfrost. This challenge only strengthened her belief that hardship bred strength, and she grew disdainful of those who complained about their circumstances without making an effort to improve them. Warriorhood: Her true vulnerability was revealed only to a select few. After her father Snowstorm died in a border skirmish, Lilyriver became distant, throwing herself into her warrior duties with even more intensity. But when alone, she grieved quietly, feeling the pressure of living up to his legacy. It was during this time that she met a young warrior named Gladetail, who was the first cat to truly see past her hardened exterior. Their bond grew, and for a while, Lilyriver allowed herself to soften around him. However, tragedy struck when Gladetail was swept away during a river flood with his apprentice, Reedpaw, his body never recovered. The loss hardened her further, and from that point on, Lilyriver decided to guard her heart fiercely, refusing to let herself be vulnerable again. As she aged, her sharp wit and unyielding personality remained intact, but the fire that once fueled her battles slowly transitioned into a quieter, wiser confidence. She began mentoring a young apprentice, teaching them not just the physical skills of a warrior but the mental and emotional fortitude needed to survive in the harsh world of the clans. While she wasn’t the most affectionate mentor, her apprentice knew they had learned from one of the best. Retirement: |
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Family
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Sire: | Pending Sire (Sire will be created after approval) |
Dam: | Pending Dam (Dam will be created after approval) |
Pedigree
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Notes & Additional Details
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Parent Pool: | This character is a part of the Parent Pool. |
Genetics: | This character requires a genetic code to be bred. |
Bans Data: | Lilyriver has been compiled into the bans records. Lilyriver is a Female Cat with a White Non-color restricted pelt of Long Normal textured hair. They are of Medium Size and Common build. Their eyes are Blue and ears are Normal. Their tail is Normal, with Normal paws and Normal legs. They are of Non-purebred descent. |
Approved
HIstory:
“Lilykit was born to a two well-respected warriors, Cloudfall and Snowstorm, – Her true vulnerability was revealed only to a select few. After her father Ashstorm died in a border skirmish” – This is still not addressed. Is her sire Snowstorm or Ashstorm?
“but few could deny that she consider herself a skilled warriors in RiverClan” – warriors should be singular; ‘warrior’
Almost there!
Appearance:
“Her eyes are a rare shade of extremely pale, glimmering like the sky against clouds in contrast to her pale form, framed by soft white lashes” – I think you forgot to add ‘blue’ after ‘extremely pale’
Personality:
“She is a force to be reckoned with and she despises many cats who walk through life without struggle and claim they deserve more than they’re given.” – Mild powerplay. She thinks herself a force to be reckoned with would be more fitting.
History:
“Lilykit was born to a well-respected warrior couple, Cloudfall and Snowstorm, in the heart of RiverClan” – If you’re using ‘couple’ as a mated pair instead of a ‘two cats’, I’d recommand changing the wording so it doesn’t imply them being mates, as clan cats aren’t generally exclusive enough for a whole clan to consider two cats mates.
“Her assertive nature sometimes led to clashes with her and Mallowfrost, but Mallowfrost admittedly admired her boldness.” – Is Mallowfrost her mentor? In an earlier line, you listed her mentor as “blank”
“After her father Ashstorm died in a border skirmish…” – Earlier you said her sire’s name was “Snowstorm”
“but few could deny that she was one of the most skilled warriors in RiverClan. ” – Powerplay.
“young young apprentice” – this may just be an error.